It is impressive how much a sentence can be improved by writing in active voice, and using strong action verbs. I often forget when I am writing about the position of my reader. I want my writing to be interesting, and maintain their attention. That means eliminating run-on sentences as well.
Most of what I learned in the reading was information that I had previously learned, and forgotten. It isn't everyday you have to distinguish between a transitive or intransitive verb, identifying whether the case is nominative, objective or possessive. Relearning all of these rules were helpful to apply to my other classes. I am in a writing and reporting class, and it is important to have concise, descriptive writing that gets straight to the point.
The editing mistake I encountered this week was on a menu at Bize Dessert Studio. Under each type of cake, a description is listed. The mistake I found was "are famous cakes," instead of what should have been "our famous cakes". In the same description, there is a second and third mistake. This whole sentence was, "Are famous cakes, created in their distinguish look, usually served at a private parties." I believe the adjective should be distinguished rather than distinguish. If they intended to use distinguish as "to notice", then she should have used it as a verb instead of an adjective. They should also omit the letter "a," because parties is plural and "a" would go with a singular noun.
I couldn't attach a photo of the menu, but I provided the link for anyone who would like to see. The mistakes were in the description of "High-Tea Cakes."
http://bizedessertstudio.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/02/BIZE-dessert-studio-Downloadable-Menu-Flyer-02-01-2016.pdf
Oh man, the mix-up of "are" and "our" is something that drives me nuts! Good find!
ReplyDeleteOh man, the mix-up of "are" and "our" is something that drives me nuts! Good find!
ReplyDeleteIt is odd how easy it is to forget the things we have learned along the way when you aren't paying attention to them daily.
ReplyDeleteIt's crazy to me that people can make those kinds of mistakes on things that should be professional. You would think they would have it proofread prior to printing? I see mistakes on restaurant menus all the time.
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